http://1trackmind.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] 1trackmind.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] numb3rsflashfic 2007-01-07 08:37 am (UTC)

Nicely done. This part was especially good:
Charlie’s voice shakes, but not from fear. It’s full of want, and Don wonders how he missed that before. Or maybe, knowing his own limitations, he was afraid to look. Don pushes Charlie back against the sink and, despite the heat, presses up against him, brings their bodies into full contact. And Christ, that feels good! Too good. Don thinks he should pull away, but then Charlie squirms and Don’s not thinking any more.

This is how it ends. Don freaks. He’s had sex with his brother. Twice. Once in the kitchen and once in the shower. He can’t stand the look in Charlie’s eyes when he tells him they can’t do this again, but he can’t stand looking at himself in the mirror even more. Don leaves and doesn’t stop by the house for a beer for a long time.


Nice flow and I think you've captured Don well.

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