Down the Drain by Dira Sudis (Challenge #23 - Hair)

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Title: Down the Drain
Pairings/Characters: Don/Charlie
Rating/Category: R, slash, incest
Spoilers: None
Word Count: 325
Summary: The drain in Don's shower is clogged.
Notes: Thanks to iuliamentis both for looking it over and for prying my fingers off when I could not stop tweaking.



Down the Drain

The apartment building's repairman glances from Don's short-cropped hair to the clogged shower drain with a knowing grin. "Girlfriend?"

Charlie singing tunelessly in his shower while Don shaved, and Don joining in on the chorus, unable to keep a smile off his face even after he cut himself.

Charlie yelling over the sound of the water that Don was out of conditioner, and Don yelling back that he didn't even use conditioner so he couldn't possibly be out of it, and Charlie saying, "Hey, if you don't want me to shower here..." The next time Charlie took a shower at Don's there were six bottles of conditioner lined up on the ledge, and Charlie laughed and put five away.

Charlie coming in cold and soaked and shivering too hard to talk, one night when he was upset about something Don never did quite figure out and decided to bike to Don's apartment in the middle of a winter rainstorm. Don got his wet clothes off him and bundled him into the shower and stood there with him until the steam filled the room. After a while the hot water melted Charlie's body against Don's, his face against Don's shoulder and his body loose and heavy in Don's arms.

Charlie kneeling at Don's feet while the water pounded down over both of them, Don's hands sinking into Charlie's hair and clenching irresistibly into fists as he jerked and came in Charlie's mouth. Charlie swallowing around him, hot as the water started going cold, Charlie's hands on his shaking thighs. There were strands of Charlie's hair on Don's hands when he finally let go, and he whispered, "Sorry, sorry," but Charlie grinned and stood and kissed him, hot and bitter-salty. Charlie said, "Hey, it's okay, I started it," and kept kissing him until the water had washed Don's hands clean and Don was grinning back.

"Yeah," Don says, flashing a short, uninformative smile. "Girlfriend."

Comments

[spikedluv]

♥ Great take on the challenge! Love those images. *sigh*

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I was sitting around this morning, going, "Hair, hair, what can I do with--oh." And then I had to write it. :)

[neur0vanity.livejournal.com]

Fantastic! This makes me think of one of those "five things" baby-drabbles that raeyashi did, and I always wanted someone to continue with the idea of Charlie's hair clogging up Don's shower. You're so wonderful.

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Oh, man! I totally loved that five things--especially the one about the drain!--and it had completely slipped my mind by the time I went to write this. Unconscious homage! :)

[asemic.livejournal.com]

:P

Yours is all kinds of amazing because of the six conditioners! I bet Charlie loves Herbal Essences, the floral-sweeter the better.

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Sorry, I am such a loser. :)

But, ha! Yeah, he probably borrowed his mom's once because he wasn't really thinking about it, and now he's totally addicted to that kind.

And Don knows that perfectly well, and spent five minutes standing in the 24-hour drugstore aisle, debating whether he wants Charlie to know he knows that (and then got the same damn knowing smile and "Girlfriend?" from the girl at the counter).

[iscaris.livejournal.com]

Hee. Much cuteness and hotness all within the space of a ficlet, Dira! I like the last one best (mind, as always, in gutter! Or drain, as one might prefer. *g*)

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Thanks, I'm so glad you liked this! (I get the feeling that the last one is Don's favorite, too, so you're in good company. *g*)

[rubynye.livejournal.com]

!

My brain has melted and gone down the drain with the water...

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Oh, man, I think we're going to have to call an actual plumber for that... *g*

[mojokid.livejournal.com]

Hee! I love it. Charlie showering is always a good thing, and I love the six bottles of conditioner. *g*

(It also chimes for me because I have a housemate with long Charlie-style curls, and it is totally HIS HAIR that clogs up the shower, but everyone blames me for it just because I'm a girl. *sad face*)

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Don's just... making his point, right? Six times. *g*

(Awww! Stupid gender prejudice! I am always the culprit myself, because I have v. long hair, so I'm over here perpetuating the stereotype. I bet if you had Don's haircut no one could blame you...)

[missmollyetc.livejournal.com]

There is a reason while I adore you. AND THIS FIC IS THAT REASON.

Lovely, hot descriptions and understated, happy emotions. Made my early morning, I can tell you. :)

(Also the lovely, informative e-mail which I WILL be replying to!)

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

YAY! So glad you enjoyed it!

(And ALSO YAY because I am not very good at this and as soon as I hit 'send' I was like, Shit, Molly will never speak to me again. *g*)

[ceares.livejournal.com]

Aww-really nice imagery, with a nice burst of hotness at the end.

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!

[knotted-rose.livejournal.com]

Very nice. Like this. Needed something to make me smile this morning and this did the trick. Thanks for this!

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm glad I could make you smile. :)

[qe2.livejournal.com]

*twitch*

*pant*

*grin*

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

*beams*

(And, uh, I hope it was a good kind of twitch. If there is such a thing. *g*)

[meletor-et-al.livejournal.com]

mmmmmmmm. this is short and sweet and yummy. .:: loves ::.

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Yay! So glad you enjoyed it! It was fun writing something short for once. *g*

[icyanahita.livejournal.com]

brilliant :)

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Thanks! :)

[1trackmind.livejournal.com]

The next time Charlie took a shower at Don's there were six bottles of conditioner lined up on the ledge, and Charlie laughed and put five away.

Aww, I love it!

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[dance-the-code.livejournal.com]

uninformative smile...damn, need to find an emoticon of that

Absolutely lovely...perfect.

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

Might be tricky to express in an emoticon, but if you come up with one, let me know!

And thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

[bev-crusher1971.livejournal.com]

That was really great. Hot, short and sweet...like an espresso. Liked it very much.

[dsudis.livejournal.com]

There is no better compliment than being compared to a caffeinated beverage! Thank you! :)